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1、第 1 页 共 8 页读后续写一、考纲解读提供一段 350 词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据 该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150 词左右），将其发展成一篇与 给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。二、原题分析原文材料 350 词以内，所续写文章 150 词左右。原文多是情 节丰富的记叙文，偶有少量的 议论文。原文给 出 10 处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所 续 写短文应使用 5 个以上。续写部分分 为两段，每段开头语已经给出。续写部分分 为两大类别：1)半开放性质。必须依据文章的语境逻辑推理续写。2)完全开放性质。可以依据文章的思路，自己 发挥。三、注意事项词数要求。

2、 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。应用语 言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。 上下文的连贯性。四、评分原则本题总 分为 25 分，按 5 个档次给分。评分时 ，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。词数少于 130 的，从总分中减去 2 分。评分时 ，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；(2)内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；(4)上下文的连贯性。拼写与 标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面， 评 分时， 应视其对交际的

3、影响程度予以考虑。如书写 较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。第 2 页 共 8 页续写导练（一）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。When I was eleven years old, I had a big accident. I get scared even now when I think about that time. I went skating near my house. There were many people, and I saw some of them falling on the ice.It was my first time

4、 to go ice skating, so I was nervous. I was wondering how to skate.I went with a friend who was very skillful. He spent some time teaching me how to skate,but I didnt learn much. He left me and skated all around. As soon as he left, I fell down. I envied the other people because they could skate wel

5、l.I was bored because I kept falling so I took off my skates and just walked around on the ice in my shoes. It was cold and my hands were frozen.Suddenly, I stepped on something that was not hard. What was it? It was a weak place in the ice. When I stepped there, I sank under the ice. I thought that

6、 I was going to die, but I did my best to grab something to get out from under the ice. I tried to grab the edge of the ice, but it was very difficult for an eleven-year-old.It seemed like a very long time, like a year. Then, fortunately, someone helped me. He grabbed my arms and pulled me up. So, I

7、 lived and Im still alive today.I thanked him. At that time, my friend came back. I was annoyed at him because he was supposed to take care of me, but he didnt. He was embarrassed. When I took a taxi home, the taxi driver was surprised and asked what had happened. I didnt want to say anything becaus

8、e I was tired and scared. Even now, whenever I think about that time, I feel uncomfortable. I dont want to go skating again even now.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写提示：本文讲述了作者 11 岁去滑冰的一段经历，由于自己的滑冰技能不如别人娴熟，因而独自一人 尝试练习总会跌跌撞撞，从而对滑冰这 件事留下

9、了不好的印象。由续写第一段的提示语“很久以后我才又一次去滑冰”可知，这一次去滑冰，作者会抱着不一样的态度的。那么首先得明确一点，对 于这次滑冰，一定要有一个妥当的理由，不然我自己是不会去的。显然，作者已不在是当时那个自己，他以前就不是特 别擅长滑冰，因此他此次不会像当时那样独自一人去练习，而是极有可能同别人一起去的。与上一次的 经历相比， 这一次不会 进展得特别顺利，但是起码有所进步，毕竟一次学好很难。那么，写作时宜注意练习滑冰以及有人陪同指导滑冰的细节问题。同时，在作者的心理活动方面，也是有一个与过去滑冰时 的心情的变化的，那得是一个起伏的过程，此处对作者心情的描述可以客观中性些，对滑冰的恐

10、惧情绪的描述 则相对减弱些。由续写第二段的提示语可知，作者以后抽不出 时间滑冰了，那么这一段应试着写一写作者为什么抽不出时间去滑冰的原因了，毋庸置疑，这势必与作者工作或家庭上的繁琐事情有关。换句话说，作者随着年龄第 3 页 共 8 页的增长，找工作、结婚、抚养孩子等都有可能成为作者忙碌的理由。除此以外，随着时间的流逝，作者对滑冰的经历必然是有感悟的，那么就需要增加一些作者对过 去或者未来的想法。最后，可尝试与前面的内容有所呼应。One possible version:示例一Paragraph 1:It was long before I went skating once again, ac

11、companied by one of my friends. This time I was careful and cautious, and my friend took special care of me. I was so fortunate this time that I managed not to fall down. Gradually I learned to skate well and became skillful. I felt very confident and no longer scared.Paragraph 2:However, ever since

12、 then I havent found any time to go skating, not because I do not like skating, but because I am too busy working. Ive learned a lot from these two skating experiences. We all have moments of desperation. But if we can face them bravely, thats when we find out how strong we really are. Whatever you

13、do, you must have the patience to do it as well as the skill. Remember: never get too much pride because of victory or lose heart in case of failure.示例二（此示例为图书高中英语写作亮点揭秘主编所写，较之示例一，更 值得参考和学习）Paragraph 1:It was long long before I went skating once again, and that was when we graduated from the univers

14、ity. Our monitor advised us all to go skating, and I decided to follow his advice although I still felt a little scared. Soon we were active on the ice. One of my roommates was very skillful and she patiently explained to me how to start. Step by step, I was able to stand up on the ice myself and he

15、aded out a little, not so steadily and I fell down many times. I was grateful to her for I managed to skate that day, though I couldnt be like others, who could skate well. I had a nice time that day!Paragraph 2:However, ever since then I havent found any time to go skating, because immediately I di

16、ved into the applying for the suitable jobs. And then, fortunately, I met my honey and got married. As was expected, one baby came into the world and was now smiling to me every day. As for the skating, maybe I could be on the ice again when my baby is grown up and asks me one hundred times!续写导练（二）阅

17、读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Mr Brown lived in a house less than two miles away from his office. He was therefore able to drive home every day for lunch. Every time he drove in the middle of the day, he found cars were parked in the road outside his house, and there was no room for his own car. He h

18、ad to drive two blocks farther before he could find a place to park. Then he had to walk home. This made him very angry.He had put up a board which read “No Parking!” in the garden facing the road, but nobody seemed to pay 第 4 页 共 8 页attention to it. People only obeyed a police notice, but not a pri

19、vate one. There were no parked cars where there was a blue board with white letters on it: Police NoticeNo Parking!Mrs Brown suggested that he should steal a police notice. But he dared not, being afraid of going to prison. She then suggested that he make one just like a police notice. He said he wa

20、s not a policeman and couldnt use the word “police”. He decided that he must find a way out and started thinking hard. For several days, the smell of paint filled the house. One night he showed his life a new notice board. It was painted in white letters on a blue board: Polite NoticeNo Parking!“Oh,

21、” Mrs Brown said, “but you told me you werent going to use the word police. Thats exactly like a police notice.”“Is it?” he asked. “Look again.”She began to laugh, “You are really rather clever.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写提示：本文讲述

22、布朗先生巧妙模仿警察通告的趣味故事。polite 和 police 只有一个字母之差，却引出了一个趣味故事。第一段续写，布朗夫人为什么称丈夫如此聪明？回答 这个问题其实就是写出本文的内涵。第二段续写是一种真实的假设，表面看来警察可能会生气或惩罚 他们。但是，警察在知道真相后，结果又会是怎样呢？One possible version:Paragraph 1:Why did Mrs Brown say her husband was really rather clever? Because sje found that he had written a notice which looked

23、exactly like a police notice. He made a blue board with white letters on it, but it was not a real police notice. Being afraid of going to prison, Mr Brown certainly dared not use the word “police”, but he used “polite notice” instead of “police notice”. He was quite clever, wasnt he?Paragraph 2:If

24、the police discovered that the Browns were using a police notice, they would feel angry and punish them. It was a crime because he offended the police, passing himself off as a policeman. But Mr Brown remained very calm. He would ask the policeman to look at the board carefully. The policeman would

25、burst out laughing whern they realized what had happened.续写导练（三）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。My mother used to ask me what the most important part of the body is. Through the years I would take a 第 5 页 共 8 页guess at what I thought was the correct answer. When I was younger, I thought sound was very

26、 important to us as humans, so I said, “My ears, Mommy.”She said, “No. Many people are deaf. But they are doing well in their life. You keep thinking about it and I will ask you again soon.” Several years passed before she asked me again. Since making my first attempt, I had contemplated（深思） the cor

27、rect answer. So this time I told her, “Mommy, sight is very important to everybody, so it must be our eyes.”She looked at me and told me, “You are learning fast, but the answer is not correct because there are many people who are blind.” Over the years my mother asked me a couple more times and alwa

28、ys her answer was: “No, but you are getting smarter every year, my child.”Then last year, my grandpa died. Everybody was hurt. Everybody was crying. My Mom looked at me when it was our turn to say our final goodbye to grandpa. She asked me, “Do you know the most important body part yet, my dear?”I w

29、as surprised when she asked me this on this occasion. I always thought this was a game between her and me. She saw the confusion on my face and told me, “This question is very important. How you answer it shows whether you have learned about life. For every body part you gave me in the past, I have

30、told you were wrong and I have given you a reason why. But today is the day you will know the answer.”I look puzzled.“All your previous answers-ears, eyes, hands, heart. They are all very important to yourself. But this time I need you to think of something that is important to others.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数

31、应为 150 左右；2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写提示：母子之间的猜谜游戏，看似 简单， 实则意味深长。什么是最重要的身体部位，孩子每次都是从自己的角度进行猜测，但是母亲想引导 他打开心房，关 爱身边的人。从两处续写的提示语可知，母亲的答案是“shoulder”，所以在续写的第一段可揭示答案，并给出理由；而在第二段可以描述母亲听到孩子的回答之后所做出的回应，使文章主题统 一，含 义隽永。One possible version:Paragraph 1:“My dear, th

32、e most important body part,” she said, “is your shoulder.” “Is it because it holds up your head?” I asked. “No, it is because it can hold the head of a friend or loved one when they cry,” she replied, “Everybody needs a shoulder to cry on sometime in life, my dear. I only hope that you have enough l

33、ove and friends that you will always have a shoulder to cry on when you need it.” I saw her eyes well up with tears.第 6 页 共 8 页Paragraph 2:“Mom, I understand. And you can cry on my shoulder too.” And silently, my mother put her head on my shoulder and started to cry. It was not heavy at all, and the

34、 wetness didnt make me uncomfortable either. In fact when her warm tears damped my shoulder, I felt the pain in her heart, and I knew how hurt and lonely and vulnerable she was at that moment. I felt important. I felt like a man. I was there when someone I loved dearly needed me most.续写导练（四）阅读下面短文，根

35、据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。An 80-year-old man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45-year-old highly educated son. Suddenly a crow（乌鸦）perched （栖息） on their window.The father asked his son, “What is this?” The son replied, “It is a crow.”After a few minutes, the father asked his son for th

36、e second time, “What is this?” The son said, “Father, I have just now told you, its a crow!”After a little while, the old father again asked his son for the third time, “What is this?”At this time some expression of irritation（恼怒）was felt in the sons tone when he said to his father with a rebuff（生硬回

37、绝）. “Its a crow, a crow.” A little while later, the father again asked his son the fourth time, “What is this?”This time, the son shouted at his father, “Why do you keep asking me the same question again and again, although I have told you so many times IT IS A CROW. Are you not able to understand t

38、his?”A little later the father went to his room and came back with an old tattered（发皱的）diary, which he had maintained since his son was born.On opening a page, he asked his son to read that page.When the son read it, the following words were written in the diary:“Today my little son aged three was s

39、itting with me on the sofa, when a crow was sitting on the window. My son asked me 23 times what it was, and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow. I hugged him lovingly each time he asked me the same question. I did not at all feel irritated but I rather felt affection for my innocent so

40、n.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写提示：本篇为记叙文。一位八十岁的老人和他的成年儿子坐在沙发上。同一个 问题老人才问了三遍，儿子就已经十分恼怒和没耐心了；第四遍时，儿子已开始 对他大吼了。伤心的父亲拿出一本发皱的日记让儿子读其第 7 页 共 8 页中一页的内容：儿子小时候问了 23 遍同一个问题，父 亲仍然耐心解 释。由全文大意以及文章最后的结尾部分可知这里是父子不同态度的对比，上文叙述了父亲让儿子看自己的日记，由续写第一段 Af

41、ter reading the diary 可知，后面的内容应是儿子看了日记后的感受，以及对一些问题的思考。由续写第二段出现的关键词 feeling ashamed 可知，儿子对自己的行为感到愧疚，所以下文中儿子会 对自己的行为道歉，然后向父亲 保证以后好好对待父亲。One possible version:Paragraph 1:After reading the diary, the son was filled with tears and began to reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his father.

42、 His father would patiently answer the same question all 23 times without feeling irritation while his father asked him the same question just four times! The son thought to himself: If I attain old age, how will my son look at me? Will he think of me as a burden? Will he shout at me because of my p

43、oor sight, poor hearing or poor understanding?Paragraph 2:Feeling ashamed, the son got down on his knees before his father. He made an apology to his father, begging his father to forgive him for his bad behavior. He said this aloud, “I promise to see you happy forever, Dad. It is you who have cared

44、 for me ever since I was a little child, showering your selfless affection on me. You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university. I will serve you in the best day.”续写导练（五）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。I was touched through experiences, memories, books, stories, animals, ang

45、els, and most of all other people. People have moved me and molded（对影响重大）me with moments of love and examples of kindness.One time on the day before Christmas many years ago when I was a minimum wage mill（工厂）worker, I found myself with very little money and very little time to buy my small children

46、a few simple toys. I knew that they would have to be cheap ones and I hoped my children would like them. I hated not having enough to give them more. I hated being poor. And I hated feeling bad at Christmas rather than happy.I pulled into a store parking lot and counted my money again. It wasnt much

47、 but maybe I could get something small with it. As I was getting out of the car I noticed the Salvation Army（救世军）bell ringer at the entrance. I felt bad again because I didnt feel I could spare anything to give him. I started walking towards the entrance when two cars pulled into empty parking spots

48、 in front of me. The first was a shiny, new Cadillac and I felt a twinge of jealousy when I saw it. “How nice,” I thought, “Would it be to have enough money to buy a car like that.” The second car, though, was an ancient sedan（轿车） more beat-up and rusty than the one I was driving.A man hopped（冲）out

49、of the Cadillac and hurried into the store right past the bell ringer without a second glance. Out of the old sedan came a young mother with three small children in tow（紧随着）. Her clothes 第 8 页 共 8 页looked as worn out as her car, yet she stopped in front of the bell ringer, smiled, opened her purse, and dropped a bill in his red kettle（钱罐）.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2.应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。续写提示：本文为夹叙夹议文。作者是一位收入很低的母亲，当圣 诞节 来临时，她很为孩子们的礼物犯愁。在商店外面时，她看到两辆对比鲜明的 轿车，一 辆是凯迪拉克豪车 (Cadillac)，另一 辆是破旧的轿车。可是让她惊讶的是，豪车