1、 高三英语阶段性检测试卷评讲 - 书面表达 1 Task of writing 教育部在 2007年工作要点中明确提出：加强教育改革和发展 ， 开展师范生免费教育的试点 ， 引导各地建立鼓励优秀人才当教师的新机制 。 假定你是中国某高中的学生李华 ， 你的朋友约翰在网上看到了与以上信息相关的消息 。 下面是他刚发给你的电子邮件 ， 请你回复 。 词数：120左右 。 Dear Li Hua, I just happened to learn that Chinas decided to give free education to normal university students in t
2、he near future and Im really interested in your response to the news. What do your schoolmates think of the policy? Do you want to be a teacher yourself? John 2 Analysis of key points 1. Your response (as well as several reasons); 2. Your classmates opinions (maybe divided); 3. Will you be a teacher
3、 yourself ? 3 Analysis of students writing Dear John, I have received your letter, which you want to know my response to the news.Well, Im really pride to discuss this hot policy with you.My ideas are : 1. The policys appearance will result in the Chinese education systems change, and the change wil
4、l let our nation be more prosperous. 2. There are many students from poor families can go to universities. When my classmates learnt the news, they were very excited. They said they were glad to be teachers because teachers were great jobs. It was teacher that spread knowledge and help us out of con
5、fusion. But I dont want to be a teacher because Im not interested. How about you ?Are you considering to be a teacher? Li Hua 4 Dear John, I have received your letter, which you want to know my response to the news.Well, Im really pride to discuss this hot policy with you. Im glad to receive your le
6、tter saying that you proud 5 My ideas are : 1. The policys appearance will result in the Chinese education systems change, and the change will let our nation be more prosperous. 2. There are many students from poor families can go to universities. As far as Im concerned, the policy will result in gr
7、eat change in the Chinese educational system , and then our nation will be more prosperous. Many students from poor families can go to universities. 6 When my classmates learnt the news, they were very excited. They said they were glad to be teachers because teachers were great jobs. It was teacher
8、that spread knowledge and help us out of confusion. They say that they are glad to be teachers because teaching is a great job. It is a teacher who / that spreads knowledge and helps us out of confusion. 7 But I dont want to be a teacher because Im not interested. How about you ? Are you considering
9、 to be a teacher ? Li Hua My interest doesnt lie in teaching, much as I admire teachers. How about you ? Are you considering being a teacher in your area ? 8 Conclusion of mistakes 1. Simple and direct translation; 2. A confusing structure; 3. Illogical order; 4. Verb tenses not in agreement; 5. Chi
10、nglish expressions; 6. Improper sentence patterns; 7. Drifting off the topic or leaving out some required information. 9 Enjoying a model writing Dear John , Im very glad that youre so much concerned with the policy. Brought into effect about one year ago, it has drawn attention of the whole nation,
11、 since education is closely linked to the development of a country. My classmates are mostly inspired by the news.They hold the idea that it has provided a good opportunity for those students who have a desire to be teachers but cant afford the high tuition. As a consequence of these talented studen
12、ts taking up teaching, we can surely expect a great promotion in the area of education. I myself come from a poor family and being a teacher is my dream from childhood. Thanks to the policy, Ill have a chance to devote myself to teaching and Ill be more than glad to do that. Li Hua _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ 10
