1、智课网 TOEFL备考资料托福满分作文惯用的4种结尾摘要： 一篇让托福写作考官满意的作文，不光要有一个漂亮的开头，一个精彩的结尾对于这篇文章而言同样重要。有不少的考生认为，只要有好的开头就好，考官不会认真看结尾部分。其实你错了，写作也一样需要善始善终。有一个精彩的结尾也能让你的托福写作增色不少。如果你想要明天考试托福写作满分，不妨尝试一下以下4种结尾招式。满分作文惯用的4种结尾：写作招式一：回答问题E.g.1 When a country develops its technology; the traditional skills and ways of life die out.It is
2、 pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? In conclusion, without suggesting that all technology is necessarily good,I think it is by no means pointless,in any way, to try to keep traditions alive with technology.We should not ignore technology,
3、because it can be our friend and support our way of life.这个结尾段落明确地提出了自己的观点，不是所有的科技都是好的，但是科技也不是完全没有用处的。写作招式二：不要添加新的信息E.g.2 Happiness is considered to be very important in life.Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?Like self-awareness，this is also very diffic
4、ult to achievebut I think these are the two factors that may be the most important for achieving happiness.用一句话明确自己的观点，幸福很难定义，可能有两个因素起到作用。广告时间：参加马叔 托福 保分班的童鞋，9月5日的保分成绩出来啦想考100+的宝宝们，还不快快入群写作招式三：2-3 个句子为宜E.g.3 Some people believe that childrens leisure activities must be educational; otherwise they ar
5、e a complete waste of time.Do you agree or disagree?Finally,I think it is also important to remember that children need to relax as well as work.If everything they do must have some educational or academic relevance,then they will soon get tired of studying altogether,which is the last thing parents
6、 would want.两句话，作者的态度很明确，学生不可能花所有的时间去学习，否则就会完全失去对学习的兴趣，所以也应该给学生一些放松的时间。一般在结尾段的最开始部分，考生就应该给考官一个明确的信号词，让考官了解文章已经进入尾声了。这里所谓的信号词就是一些结尾段的套句：信号词：Finally，to sum up，in conclusion，in brief，therefore，thus，overall句型：1. it can be concluded that2. we can find that3. I think it is also important to remember that4
7、. the main point is to make sure that5. I believe that/ Personally， I think that/ I would say that/ I agree that/ My view is that写作招式四：可采用的技巧1.总结式(重述前文)把在前文中的观点在结尾段进行重述，但是不能出现与开头段或者题目中的单词重复。E.g.4 *In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the cause
8、of this? What solutions can you suggest? Perhaps parenting classes are needed to help them to do this,and high quality nursery schools could be established that would support families more in terms of raising the next generation.The government should fund this kind of parental support,because this i
9、s no longer a problem for individual families,but for society as a whole.把 solutions进行简单地再次描写父母、好的托儿所、政府的资金扶助。*Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? I think,therefore,that governments
10、 need to raise this awareness in the generalpublic.Children can be educated about environmental issues at school,but adults need to take action.Governments can encourage such action by putting taxes on packaging,such as plastic bags,by providing recycling services and by fining households and shops
11、that do not attempt to recycle their waste.重述上文的内容，由政府采取措施 提高意识(children 如果是为了钱或者其他，可做兼职。*Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.Others,however,think that change is always a good thing.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.In conclusion,I would
12、 say that change can be stimulating and energizing for individuals when they pursue it themselves,but that all change,including that which is imposed on people,does not necessarily have good outcomes.如果是人们自己的选择那么改变是一件好的事情，但如果是被强加于身，改变则不会带来任何可喜的效果。3.折中式：很难判断In conclusion，I do not think其中到底谁占据主导地位，或者什
13、么是最重要的，两者是缺一不可的，需共同存在。E.g.6 Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. That either nature or nurture is the major influence on a person,but that both have powerful effects.How
14、these factors interact is still unknown today and they remain largely unpredictable in a persons life.两者是缺一不可的，天赋和后天培养同等重要。另外， 托福写作 中常常会犯一些明显的错误。往往这些错误会是我们分数偏低的致命因素，我们最不该犯的错误就是大众都会犯的错误，错了，那就说明我们并没有自己独特的领悟能力!要谨记，问题虽简单，切不可掉以轻心。接下来马叔就为大家收集整理托福写作考试中常易犯的十个错误。1、不一致(Disagreements)所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，它还包括了数的不一致时态
15、不一致及代词不一致等。例 1. When one have money, he can do what he want to.(人一旦有了钱，他就能想干什么就干什么。)剖析：one是单数第三人称，因而本句的have应改为has;同理want应改为wants。本句是典型的主谓不一致。改为：Once one has money, he can do what he wants(to do).2、修饰语错位(Misplaced Modifiers)英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子的含义可能引起变化。对于这一点中国学生往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解。例 1. I b
16、elieve I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus.剖析：better位置不当，应置于句末。3、句子不完整(Sentence Fragments)在口语中，交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是书面语就不同了，句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常发生在主句写完以后，笔者又想加些补充说明时发生。例 1. There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV, radio, newspaper and
17、so on.剖析：本句后半部分“for example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句。改为：There are many ways to know society, for example, by TV, radio, and newspaper.4、悬垂修饰语(Dangling Modifiers)所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清。例如：At the age of ten，my grandfather died. 这句中“at the age of ten” 只点出十岁时，
18、但没有说明“谁” 十岁时。按一般推理不可能是my grandfather，如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改明确一点，全句就不那么费解了。改为：When I was ten, my grandfather died.例 1. To do well in college, good grades are essential.剖析：句中不定式短语“to do well in college”的逻辑主语不清楚。改为：To do well in college, a student needs good grades.5、词性误用(Misuse of Parts of Speech)“词性误用”常表现为：介词
19、当动词用;形容词当副词用 ;名词当动词用等。例 1. None can negative the importance of money.剖析：negative系形容词，误作动词。改为：None can deny the importance of money.6、指代不清(Ambiguous Reference of Pronouns)指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清，或者先后所用的代词不一致。试看下面这一句：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.(玛丽和我姐姐很要好
20、，因为她要她做她的伴娘。)读完上面这一句话，读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚，谁将当伴娘。如果我们把易于引起误解的代词的所指对象加以明确，意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.例 1. And we can also know the society by serving it yourself.剖析：句中人称代词we和反身代词yourself指代不一致。改为：We can also know society by serving i
21、t ourselves.7、不间断句子(Run-on Sentences)什么叫run-on sentence?童鞋们可以看下面的例句。例 1. There are many ways we get to know the outside world.剖析：这个句子包含了两层完整的意思：“There are many ways.”以及“We get to know the outside world.”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。改为：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或 There are many
22、 ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.8、措词毛病(Troubles in Diction)Diction是指在特定的句子中如何适当地选用词语的问题，学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲，斟酌的习惯。他们往往随心所欲，拿来就用。所以作文中用词不当的错误比比皆是。例 1. The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.(农业方面化学物质使用的不断增加也造成了污染。)剖析：显然，考生把obstacle
23、s“障碍”“障碍物”误作substance“ 物质”了。另外“the increasing use(不断增加的使用)” 应改为 “abusive use(滥用)”。改为：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.9、累赘(Redundancy)言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词;写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy，I like him.本句的“the
24、fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”。可以改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him.例 1. For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.剖析：整个句子可以大大简化。改为：Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.10、不连贯(Incoherence)不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通。这也是考生常犯的毛病。例 1. The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.剖析：The fresh water与逗号后的it 不连贯。It与things在数方面不一致。改为：Fresh water is the most important thing in the world.
