1、Application Essay 写作 第一课 College Essay Question Help (2)College Essay Question Help第二类 topics:Discuss some issue of personal, local, national or international concern and its importance to you.This question is among the hardest to answer. Even here you need to stay personal. If a cause is important
2、to you or you have a strong opinion about it, relate it back to your life. What about you, your experiences, or your upbringing has made this issue resonate for you? Why do you care? Does the issue affect you personally in any way? Be sure to write about both sides of the issues to show that you can
3、 think objectively and logically. Showing that you are passionate is great; showing that you are one-sided or bull-headed is not. Finally, be sure to refrain from making sweeping generalizations about issues that would be out of your range of experience.附两篇范文：SAMPLE ESSAY 1: Carnegie-Mellon, current
4、 affairs: Middle East debateA Greek philosopher once said, “In argument, truth is born.” Even though sometimes feelings and emotions come into play that confuse the issue at hand, usually an argument results in a new insight on the subject. Even if a person holds strong views that are unshaken by an
5、ything his adversary may say, he may nevertheless gain from the debate. It forces him to organize and analyze his views, leaving him with a clearer understanding of the subject than before. Further, his opponents arguments help him better appreciate his views and their differences. Finally, the argu
6、ment forces both to look inwards, at their character and value system.For these reasons, I enjoy debating issues that are important to me and about which I hold strong views. One such issue receiving great national attention is the Middle East peace process. While the peace process has always been i
7、mportant to the American community as a whole, and more specifically to the Jewish American community, the assassination of Israel Prime Minister Yitzhak Rabin has focused the spotlight upon it, as well as intensified the debate around it. Since I attend a private Jewish school, I often discuss this
8、 topic with my peers, often finding myself in the minority. Most of them support the peace process, while I adhere to the views of the Likud (opposition) party, which opposes the peace process.Complicating the issue are several emotional stigmas that are often attached to it, transforming the discus
9、sion from an objective one to one driven by passion. The foremost of these stigmas is the accusation, which is often hurled at the opponents of the peace process, of promoting war and violence. Often made by people who know little about the issue, this view fails to realize that opposition to the pe
10、ace process does not imply opposition of peace. Rather, it implies disapproval of certain tactics and specifics of the peace process as it was carried out by Rabin.Another commonly advanced accusation against American Jews who disagree with the peace process centers around the question of whether th
11、ey have the right to influence Israeli policy. “You dont have to send your children to the Army,” it is said, “your children dont die in wars. What right have you to oppose peace?!” The fallacy of this argument is that it doesnt differentiate between belief and action. While it is true, for precisel
12、y the reasons above, that American Jews have no right to try to influence Israeli policy, that does not preclude them from having ideas of what that policy should be.Finally, the assassination of Yitzhak Rabin has introduced yet another dimension into this debate. In its aftermath, opposing the peac
13、e process sometimes is identified with condoning the assassination itself. Such an identification of the man and his beliefs involves grave dangers, such as rashly implementing his ideas in a flurry of compassion and commiseration.What all of these stigmas have in common is that they forsake logical
14、 and objective debate, opting rather for emotions, generalizations and accusations. And the dangers of that happening are the main lesson I learned from my debates. While those debates have shed new light on the issue and have forced me to reconsider what I think is moral and just, most importantly
15、they have demonstrated the necessity of objectiveness and removal of emotions from the discussion, especially when, as in the case of the peace process, thousands of lives are at stake. When passions and hatred take over, we must stop and think of what it all is really about.温馨提示：专业的事情，交给专业的机构来完成。10
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17、on for improvement came from one officer who felt that the statements made in the first paragraph were too broad and lofty for a college essay.Very clear headed.This student put time and energy into this essay and it shows in the writing style, the flow of discourse and the conclusions that the writ
18、er comes to in the end. It is a well thought out essay with depth and focus.This essay is well written, and brings out an interesting point of view, one of which I had not been aware until now. This author grasps the subtleties of a difficult political position. I think he would be an interesting pe
19、rson to know, and would certainly make people think, both in class and in discussions outside of academics.The argument in the essay is logical and substantiated with solid examples, making it an effective representation of the students thought and writing style while revealing the students personal
20、 opinions on the Middle East peace process.SAMPLE ESSAY 2: Harvard, current affairs/family illness: MedicineThe Key to Medical AdvancementThroughout the twentieth century, virtually every aspect of modern medicine has reaped the rewards of technological advancements. Society will be forever indebted
21、 to those pioneers who conceived the vast array of preventions, treatments, and cures that are readily available to mankind today. Apparently, the imaginations of these pioneers know no boundaries, for every day we are informed of progress in yet another domain of study.Until recently, relatively li
22、ttle ethical consideration needed to accompany our quest for improvement. Indeed, few can find moral fault with important discoveries such as a polio vaccine and insulin. However, medicine is now venturing into areas, such as genetics, which explore the very core of human existence. Consequently, I
23、believe that if medical advancements in these fields are going to continue to benefit society, we need to consider all possible ethical effects before implementing new discoveries. We must ensure that the potential for abuse will not override the capacity for gain.One of the biggest breakthroughs in
24、 genetics has been the use of bacteria to genetically engineer drugs such as insulin and growth hormone. Five years ago, a brain tumor destroyed my brothers pituitary gland. He now takes genetically engineered growth hormone on a daily basis to replace that which he no longer naturally produces. Thi
25、s technology has helped give back to him a portion of what he lost to the tumor. An effort is currently underway to make growth hormone more readily available to the general public for treatment of ailments such as osteoporosis, severe burns, and infertility. Many people could benefit from growth ho
26、rmone, but there is also a high probability that it will be abused for athletic purposes. Football great Lyle Alzado appeared on national television appealing to the public to refrain from misusing the growth hormone which he felt was responsible for his brain cancer. Therefore I feel we need to lim
27、it how available we make the drug in order to ensure that it does more good than harm.Research in genetics is also helping us to locate genes which are linked to diseases such as Cystic Fibrosis, Sickle Cell Anemia, and Huntingtons disease. The knowledge of these genes may lead to better treatments
28、and maybe even a cure one day. As well, genetics is now being used in amniocentesis tests to determine, for abortion purposes, if an embryo has an abnormality such as the medical condition known as Downs Syndrome.Giving people the opportunity to abort an unplanned child is an issue all by itself. Gi
29、ving people the opportunity to abort a planned pregnancy because the child isnt what they wanted is absolutely ludicrous. I am a support worker for a child who has Downs Syndrome. Hes every bit as much a human being as you and I, and therefore is entitled to all the privileges that accompany the sta
30、tus. Every day he makes me smile and reminds me of how lucky I am simply to be alive. He is the epitome of the innocence which is all too often absent from our fast-paced lives.What happens when our knowledge expands, as it inevitably will, and an amniocentesis can test for hair and eye color? Will
31、we abort a pregnancy because the child wont develop blond hair and blue eyes? After all, the argument could be made that a poor physical appearance may cause hardship in life. More importantly, if the technology becomes available, will we custom design children to our specifications by manipulating
32、their genes? Whatever happened to playing the cards were dealt? If were not careful we might create another Frankenstein.Implementing these, and other technologies raises some critical ethical issues. A world war took place over 50 years ago because numerous countries intensely disagreed with Adolf
33、Hitler on some of these same issues. Hitler wanted to create a supreme race and eliminate disabled people such as those having Downs Syndrome. Do we agree with basic principles behind Hitlers intentions and merely disagree with the method he employed? Hitler was one of the most despised men of moder
34、n history. Dont look now, but it appears as though were simply taking a different, more accepted route to the same destination.Technology seems to be growing at an exponential rate. Every door we open leads to more doors which conceal secrets. The majority of the population can only imagine the exci
35、tement of opening one of these doors for the first time ever. The pursuit of this excitement has understandably overwhelmed us. Weve been blindly unlocking doors as fast as possible with little concern for what might lie beyond the door. However, if mankind is going to continue to prosper we need to
36、 start peering through the keyhole to see what lies beyond the door. Then, and only then, can we catch a glimpse of the pros and cons of opening it.Until now, the main difficulty in unlocking a door has been finding the right key. Perhaps the true challenge actually lies in deciding which doors shou
37、ld be opened and which doors are better left untouched. The principle consideration in making this decision needs to be the ethics of its potential applications.COMMENTS:This applicant took a risky approach by tackling a tough subject-one that would be hard for most college graduates (let alone a hi
38、gh school senior) to write about succinctly. However, the writer made a good effort. As one officer commented, “The author obviously thinks deeply about these important issues, and an admission officer would recognize that this student would probably think deeply about other issues raised in classes
39、.” Tackling these big issues brings two inherent risks. First, the subject matter begs a serious approach, and the writer risks coming across as stiff and impersonal. Second, the writer risks getting in over his or her head and can end up making general claims without the experience or ability to ba
40、ck them up.This student holds incredibly passionate beliefs about the ethics of medical research. But ethics is a slippery topic, far too subjective for the amount of generalizations he has made. The “we need tos” and “we musts” make his assertions a little too final.The language is a bit stiff and
41、awkward, and the essay tends to ramble.“Five years ago, a brain tumor destroyed my brothers pituitary gland.” This would be a great opening sentence! So why is it buried? Personal experience is always a useful tool for introducing ones own beliefs, much more so than unsupported blanket statements. H
42、ad the student begun here, he would have written a stronger essay without having to compromise his position one bit.In paragraph seven: Be careful! The Holocaust is a loaded example. There was a lot more to it than just eradicating disabilities. Make sure you understand the implications of the paral
43、lels you draw.It is dangerous for a nonprofessional (especially a high school student) to attempt writing as though the essay will be presented at a professional conference. You may be writing to someone who knows much more than you and will be irritated by your hackneyed proclamations. I give my students this advice: “Write small.” Keep the topic close to your own life and write only about something you know.I admire the student for voicing his beliefs, but Id admire him even more if he had played devils advocate a bit. One of my former
