1、2014 年 12 月无老师优秀范例：“To spend, or not to spend: that is the question.” When it comes to government expenditure on space project, the debate in both the community and the common world has come to a vogue. Should government spend a considerable amount of money on exploration of the universe, as asserte
2、d by scientists, scholars, and government officials; or should these money go to more pressing issues of the day, as the poor and the miserable maintains? As for me I commit to the notion that space technology, though impractical at first glance, is of vital importance to humankind, and is therefore
3、 worthy of our taxes.无老师优秀翻译：“剁手，还是不剁，这是个问题”当涉及到政府对于空间探索的投资，坊间关于这一点的争论已经甚嚣尘上。政府应该把很多钱花到空间探索上么，就像科学家，学者和政府官员所宣扬的那样；亦或者应该把钱花在今天更迫切的事情上，比如说穷人救济和低保户的救济？对我来说，我赞成空间科技，虽然乍看上去不是很实际，但是其实对于人类来说很重要，我们的纳税花在这上也更值得。无老师平庸范例：”To spend, or not to spend, that is a question” When we talk about spending money on space
4、travelling, there are a lot of questions on this. Should the government spend money on space travelling, just as scientiests, scholars, and governments said; or should they spend the money on others important things, just like giving money to the poor people and disabled people? For me, I will suppo
5、rt the space travelling, although they are not real, but they are important for people, our taxes should invest in them.无老师精析：本文的作者，应该特别符合广大中国考生的口味。原因有 3 点：第一，思路正统，完全按照我们书写的套路来写，首先引入出题，然后列出两方意见，最后给出自己的意见。第二，写得好模仿。开头就是万能的 To be, or not to be 的变体，容易磨坊。第三，有用，好模仿。come to a vogue， comes to 这样的固定搭配。好了，话不多
6、说，亮家伙！第一句，优秀范例“To spend, or not to spend: that is the question.” When it comes to government expenditure on space project, the debate in both the community and the common world has come to a vogue.对比平庸范例”To spend, or not to spend, that is a question” When we talk about spending money on space travel
7、ling, there are a lot of questions on this.首先优秀范例能想到用 To be, or not to be 这样的表达方式本来就很赞，而且想一想，这个貌似是可以作为万能开头的。就是把be，spend 换做主题词，就可以作为任何一篇作文的开头。很漂亮！接下来，有时我们的老朋友，固定搭配“it comes to”拿出来替代土土的 when we talk about 真是太赞了！而且本文的作者，一大优点就是词汇量够凶悍！“expenditure”“space project”“debate in”用词都还蛮书面化的，加分！而且接下来的“the communi
8、ty and the common world”虽然直译过来，中文没有很大差别，但是稍有一点出师表之中的“宫中府中俱为一体”的感觉，又是显示出自己的词汇量的强大。而且优秀范例最后的 come to a vogue，赞()/！不仅因为优秀范例没有落入俗套的用 popular，而且作者在用 vogue 这个词的时候，也没有用他的形容词词性，而是用了它的名词词性，这个是很漂亮的。第二句，优秀范例 Should government spend a considerable amount of money on exploration of the universe, as asserted by s
9、cientists, scholars, and government officials; or should these money go to more pressing issues of the day, as the poor and the miserable maintains?对比平庸范例 Should the government spend money on space travelling, just as scientists, scholars, and governments said; or should they spend the money on othe
10、rs important things, just like giving money to the poor people and disabled people?在本句之中优秀范例的优点在于两点，第一点：是在于句型结构的多样性，第二点是在于词汇量的丰富。结构的多样性在于 2 点，should这样的疑问句，而不是我们平时常用的陈述句，第二点 as asserted by 也是我们平时不常用到的句型。接下来再说词汇，当说到空间探索，写的是 exploration of the universe，而不是前文中用到的 space project，赞！然后接下来，某人说，没有用平庸范例的 scien
11、tiests, scholars, and governments said 这种表达方式，而是用了比较少见的过去分词的表达形式，再加一分。后半句 pressing issues 这个表达方法用的地道！赞！充分显示了作者平时阅读量的丰富！至于最后的 miserable maintains 这就厉害了，虽然不是特别的地道，但是能用到 miserable 这个词，这就厉害了！这可是悲惨世界名字之中所用的词汇。每一个词拿出来都是加分点。这么多加分点，不拿高分都难！最后一句，优秀范例 As for me I commit to the notion that space technology, tho
12、ugh impractical at first glance, is of vital importance to humankind, and is therefore worthy of our taxes.对比平庸范例 For me, I will support the space travelling, although they are not real, but they are important for people, our taxes should invest in them.其实在这里对比平庸范例就能看出来，当表示“我支持 XXX”的时候，我们总是在用 I supp
13、ort 或者 I agree with，但是在本文之中作者用到了地道的 As for me I commit to the notion that，加分！而且更漂亮的是后面，though impractical at first glance 这个从句不仅用在句中，而不是句首，而且还用到了 at first glance 这样精细打磨的表达方式，这已经不仅是词汇量丰富了，这里还体现出作者论理的精如发丝，先退一步，然后进而击之！漂亮！而且本句话最后的表达方式也非常的灵活！is of vital importance，想一想，我们平时最常用的也就是 very important，在这里坐着不仅用到
14、了 be of vital，而且还把我们常用的形容词 important 用到了名词形式 importance，加分！至于最后一部分，其实最大的亮点是在于作者已经跳出了英翻中限制，已经开始直接用英文的表达方式来表达，因为按照中文的语序，翻译过来的表达方式应该像是平庸范例的 our taxes should invest in them.但是优秀范例用的是 is worthy of 进行连接，结果 our taxes 做的是宾语，这就是每一种语言都有自己的表达方式，想写的好的话，都要慢慢的记住对应的英文的表达方式，而不是做生硬的词对词的翻译，这是要通过多阅读多思考，来积累的。敲下这最后一行的时候
15、，2015 年新年钟声即将敲响，小伙伴们，新年快乐！么么哒！2014 年 11 月无老师优秀范例：While most people take vacations as an opportunity to relax, I like to take them as opportunity to discover myself and challenge myself. Good food and good friends are great for relaxing, but they are not priorities if Im seeking to push my individual
16、 boundaries. A good location, however, can provide a worthwhile challenge that food and friends alone will notmy one month in North Europe thoroughly convinced me of that. Learning a new language, meeting new people, learning to live with only what I could fit into a backpackthese were the challenge
17、s that this new location threw at me. Even today, I still consider the experience an important part of my coming of age (成年).无老师优秀翻译：当大多数人把假期当做是一个放松的机会，我则是把假期当做是一个发现自我和挑战自我的机会。美食和伙伴纵然会让我们放松，但是如果我想提升自己的话，他们就不是第一选择了。但是，一个新的目的地【想想无老师为什么会这么翻译】，可以提供一个有益的挑战，这都是食物和朋友无法提供的，我的一个月在北欧的旅行让我知道这一切。学习一门新的语言，结交新的人，
18、学者作一名背包客【想想无老师为什么会这么翻译】，这些挑战都是一个新的目的地让我一定会学到的【想想无老师为什么会这么翻译】。即使是在今天，我仍然认为这样的经验作为成年礼的重要一部分无老师平庸范例：When every people take the holiday as an opportunity of relaxing, I take the holiday as an opportunity of finding myself and challenging myself. Although good food and food friends will make me relax, th
19、ey are not the first choice if we want to improve myself. But a new place will give me a good challenge, and foods and friends can not offer, one months North Europe holiday let me know. Learning a new language, meeting new people, learning how to be a tourist they are the challenges that a new plac
20、e will let me know. In present days, I still think that these experiences are important parts of adult.无老师精析：又是一篇以表达多样取胜优秀作文，读起来有一种读书人的如沐春风的感觉。第一句，优秀范例 While most people take vacations as an opportunity to relax, I like to take them as opportunity to discover myself and challenge myself.对比平庸范例When e
21、very people take the holiday as an opportunity of relaxing, I take the holiday as an opportunity of finding myself and challenging myself.其实在这里，优秀范例第一个亮点在于用 take them 的这个 them 来替代前文出现的vacations，虽然是很小的事情，但是既避免了相同词汇反复出现，又增强了句子的逻辑连接性，可以说写的还不错。接下来 discover 和 challenge 就写得还好，只要能想到，自然会写出来。导师平庸范例的 find 写的很
22、烂，因为 find应该是已经找到的意思，所以放在这里词不达意。第二句，优秀范例 Good food and good friends are great for relaxing, but they are not priorities if Im seeking to push my individual boundaries.对比平庸范例 Although good food and food friends will make me relax, they are not the first choice if we want to improve myself.其实优秀范例的开头，两个
23、 good 写的还好，不算很漂亮，但是后半句开始发力，首先 priority 这个词用的很好！相比于平庸范例的 the first choice 书面了很多！优秀范例尤其漂亮的是最后的 push my individual boundaries 直译过来是“推我的边界”，但是实际上的意思是让自己的能力慢慢增加，也就是提升自己的意思，写的很赞！快拿小本记下来！第三句，优秀范例，不错哦！A good location, however, can provide a worthwhile challenge that food and friends alone will notmy one mon
24、ths in North Europe thoroughly convinced me of that.对比平庸范例 But a new place will give me a good challenge, and foods and friends can not offer, one months North Europe holiday let me know.说实话，优秀范例的这个开头，也不是很好，因为这里的location，乍一看上去没头没脑，跟前文无法产生联系，也不知道作者到底想表达什么，如果能加上 compared of that，或者 compared of Good fo
25、od and good friends，就让人跟前文产生逻辑连接了，就容易懂了。接下来，优秀范例第一个亮点在于 worthwhile 这个词的使用，显示出作者还不错的词汇量，而不是像平庸范例一样简单的重复good，而且接下来的一个 that 从句也用的很妙，没有像平庸范例一样用 and 进行单纯的连接，而是用 that 从句本身的 not 转折，把这种冲突表现出来，是本句最大的亮点！当然，最后一个亮点就在于句末的 convinced me of that，有使用一个代词 that 替代了前文所描述的自己所获得了什么，点题！就是这么有才，任性！反观平庸范例的 let me know一是显得口语化
26、，二是显得啰嗦了。第四句话，有趣了！优秀范例 Learning a new language, meeting new people, learning to live with only what I could fit into a backpackthese were the challenges that this new location threw at me.平庸范例 Learning a new language, meeting new people, learing how to be a tourist they are the challenges that a new
27、 place will let me know.优秀范例的开头依旧没什么亮点 Learning a new language, meeting new people 只能算是中规中矩，但是很快亮点来啦！首先 live with 一个固定搭配，漂亮！而且还配上了only，进行程度的限定，显的更细致，接下来马上又甩出一发 fit into，固定搭配，加分！至于最后的 backpack，想到中文就能写到，但是能顺畅的写出 live with only what I could fit into a backpack，这是功夫！而且最后的 threw at写的特形象！硬抛过来，也就是自己必须接受，没有其他选择，因此无老师的中文翻译是“让我一定会学到的”，因为你必须接受，所以你不可能不学到！最后这里写的太精彩了！画面感都出来了！最后一句凤尾，优秀范例 Even today, I still consider the experience an important part of my coming of age (成年).
