1、小学英语五年级上册各单元作文范例及点评My English TeacherMiss Wang is my English teacher. Shes very pretty. She is short and thin. She has two big eyes and a small mouth. Her hairs are long. She likes cats very much. And she likes singing and dancing, too. Her English is very good. We often play games in English classe
2、s. She is very kind. We all love her.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是“我的英语老师”，是一篇介绍人物的作文。小作者开门见山，直接点题，首先介绍了英语老师的姓名，然后逐一介绍了她的外貌特征、喜好、英语水平、上课特点以及师生情感等。小朋友们在写作文时，要注意使用自己最熟悉的词组，以免写出一些错句子。写作时要注意意思连贯、语句通顺、标点正确、书写清晰、规范等。My Days of the weekIm a student and I am in Grade 5.I get up at six oclock every day. I have breakfast at
3、 half past six, and go to school at seven oclock. I have classes from Monday to Friday. I have an English class on Friday. I have a PE class on Tuesday. I usually go shopping and watch TV on the weekend.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是“我的一周”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是从自己的亲身经历写起，叙述了自己一周七天的所作所为,写得自然、流畅。小朋友们写作文时要注意人称及谓语动词的变化，要依据提示，结
4、合自己的实际，写自己身边熟悉的事情。My Favourite FoodDo you know what this is? Its colour is yellow. Its long and thin. It looks like a small boat. Guess! What is it?Oh, it is a banana. Do you know what that is? Guess again! Its colour is orange. Its round. It looks like a small ball and a small lantern. Oh, it is an
5、 orange. I like them very much. I like ice-creams, too. Chocolates and candies are yummy. I like them very much.How about you? Whats your favourite food?【要领点评】My Favourite Food 是一篇很成功的文章，小作者并不是简单地列举出自己最喜欢的每一种食物，而是有详有略地进行介绍。整篇文章用词准确、语言流畅、没有语法错误。另外，文章中出现了一些生词，可见小作者是用心查字典了。I can help do houseworkI am a
6、 girl. My name is Li Ling. Im in Class Three, Grade Five. Im helpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?【要领点评】本篇作文的题目是“我可以帮助做家务”，作者主要叙述自己在家帮助做的
7、事情，介绍自己的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详细，到位。小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲自经历的事情，这样会避免在作文时显得太空，因为只有自己经常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。写作时还要注意大小写和时态。In The KitchenThis is the kitchen of my family. Its big and nice. Look! My mother is cooking in it. This is a microwave and that is a stove. There is a big table here. There are many things on it.
8、What are these? They look yummy! Oh, theyre apples. And what are those? They are grapes.【要领点评】这篇作文的题目是“在厨房”里，作者根据自己家的厨房情况。介绍厨房里有微波炉和电炉，有一张大桌子和桌子上的物品等，以及妈妈在做饭，非常真实。小朋友们，可以从观察自己身边的事、物写起，利用所学的句子，描述身边熟悉的东西来训练习作。My VillageMy village is very beautiful. There are many houses in the village. Near the villag
9、e, there is a forest. A small river is in front of the village. The water is very clean. We can see some fish in the river. Near the river, you can see a mountain. There are some flowers and trees on the mountain. I like my village. Welcome to my village!【要领点评】本文以“我的村庄”为题描述了自己家乡的风景。介绍了村庄的房屋、森林、河流及大山
10、，使人看了这篇作文后确实感觉到“我的村庄”的美丽。小朋友们在写作时，可仔细想一下自己的村庄或所在城市的特点，尽量使用本单元学过的单词或短语进行叙述。小学英语五年级下册各单元作文范例及点评My weekendThere are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday, I often go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and I often help my mother do some housework.
11、 On Sunday, I always visit my grandparents in the morning and read books in the afternoon. After dinner, I often watch TV with my parents. We often have a good time.【要领点评】写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙周末的活动，记叙了周六和周日的上午和下午分别做了哪些活动及对活动的感受。即：周六上午：舞蹈课下午：做作业和帮妈妈做清洁周日上午：看望祖父母下午：阅读晚上：看电视，与父母交流感受：高兴和愉快。我们还可以选取周六和周日中的几个比较
12、主要的活动来写，先说明什么时间在什么地方由什么人做了什么事，有什么感受。再按照活动顺序把活动内容写清楚，最后抒发一下对这次活动或这个周末的感想。时态：这篇短文我们可以用三种时态来写: a.一般过去时（主要描述你上个周末是怎样度过的）;b.一般现在时（主要描述你经常怎样度过周末）;c.一般将来时（主要描述你要怎样过周末）。这里我们来表述平时是如何过周末的，所以采用一般现在时来写。注意：活动的相关表达方法可采用旧知识，eg.（例）起床 get up，和新知识，eg. Climb mountains去爬山中的 un很容易错写成 nu。还要注意不要出现病句，eg. “I often watch TV
13、with my parents.”不要写成 “I often with my parents watch TV .” 词量上控制在 50 80 之间。My SeasonsWe have four seasons in a year. I can do many things in each season. In spring, the weather is cool and wind, I can fly kites when its wind. And I can go hiking with my family when its sunny and cool. Summer is hot.
14、 I often go swimming. I can eat ice-cream. I can also wear my beautiful dresses. In fall I can eat tasty fruits. I can watch the leaves fall. Winter comes, its often snowy in winter. We can play with snow and make a snowman, skate and ski. And summer is my favourite season, because I can swim. I lov
15、e all the seasons.【要领点评】写法：这篇短文是描述“我的四季”，在写法上，是根据春、夏、秋、冬四季的更替来写的，先讲明每个季节的特征，之后再写在这个季节中的主要活动或比较有代表性的活动。同时讲一些自己的真实感受，最后阐述自己最喜欢的季节。在实际的写作的时候我们还可以先写出自己喜爱的季节及主要的活动内容，之后再去讲其他几个季节，还可以多讲解一下地域的季节特征和大自然中的其他景色，如：秋天的田地里一片金黄，农民在收割等等，这样写出来的四季更贴近实际。时态：这篇习作讲的是“我的四季”，是比较惯常的一些行为，所以我们最好采用一般现在时和情态动词结合活动的写法。即：在什么季节，天气如何
16、，我们可以做什么。注意：在写作内容上，不可以像以往的内容那么简单，因为有四个季节，所以要写明季节，季节天气，季节性活动，活动的人，活动的感受等，要求句子顺序要正确，在写作中还要注意关联词的使用，如用了“因为”，就不能用“所以”，二者不可以同时出现。词量要控制在 80个词以内。My familyThere are five people in my family. They are my grandma, grandpa, dad, mom and I. Look! Grandma is watching TV. Grandpa is reading a book. Dad is writing
17、 an e-mail. Mom is cooking dinner. I am doing my homework. I love my family!【要领点评】写法：这篇习作介绍了自己家的家庭成员，以及此刻他们正在干什么，表达了自己对家人的感情。时态：由于本单元主要讲的是现在进行时态，所以建议采用现在进行时态。句型：主语+be+动词的现在分词。注意：本单元的重点是现在进行时态，注意在写句子时要保持时态的完整性，即系动词和动词的 ing缺一不可。In the parkIt is sunny today .My mother, my father and I are going to the
18、park. We like the park very much. It is very big and beautiful .There are many trees and flowers in it. Look! An old man is reading a book carefully on the chair. Two boys are jumping on the ground. Their mothers are talking. Two birds are flying in the sky. The ducks are swimming in the river. They
19、 are very happy. What is the cat doing? Oh, it is running after a mouse. 【要领点评】写法：这篇习作是用现在进行时描绘出公园里的人和动物们正在进行的活动还运用了一般现在时叙述了公园美丽的景色。时态：这篇文章可以采用一般现在时和现在进行时两种时态，由于本单元的语法项目是现在进行时，因此，描述的重点要放在现在进行时态上。句型：一般现在时：主语+谓语+其他现在进行时：（1）What +be (am,is ,are)+主语+v.-ing+其他?（2）主语+be(am,is ,are)+ v.-ing+其他。A Field Trip
20、It is a nice day. Our class will have a field trip today. We are very excited. Look! Amy is watching insects. Peter is collecting leaves. They want to write a report. Mandy is catching butterflies in the woods. Tim and Bob are playing chess. Some students are having a picnic. There is a lot of delic
21、ious food. Oh, whos that over there? Miss White. What is she doing? She is taking photos. We have a very good time.【要领点评】写法：这篇习作是按照郊游时的画面来描述的，记叙了同学们分别在郊游中做了哪些活动及郊游的感受。时态：这篇文章可以用一般过去时和现在进行时来写。由于本单元主要讲的是现在进行时，所以，这里我们采用现在进行时比较合适。句型：. is/are doing sth. She /He is doing sth. Theyre doing sth.注意：活动的相关表述法采用新旧知识相结合去写。注意时态的转换、描写感受时用一般现在时。
