1、无老师满分范例：Another reason is that modern people are more effective than those in thepast. And great efficiency is one fundamental way to success. We are able to make use of manytools increasing productivity today. For instance, the computer plays an important role in our lifein terms of efficiency. As
2、I want to search material concerning the “nuclear energy”, all I have todo is to type this term on Google and a great number of sources will pop out on the screen. Giventhe past, I had to go to the library and bury me a couple of days looking for the information onnuclear energy without the assistan
3、ce of computers. The distance is conspicuous, thus modernpeople with advanced technology would succeed more readily.无老师优秀翻译：另外一个原因是现代的人比之前的人效率会更高。更好的效率是成功的一个关键因素。我们今天可以更好地使用工具来提高我们的效率。比如，电脑就在增加我们效率这方面上起到了很重要的作用。当我想搜寻关于核能源的材料的时候，我所需要做的所有的事情就是将这个词输入google，然后接下来很多的资料就会呈现在我的屏幕上。如果是在过去，我就不得不去图书馆，把自己埋在资料堆
4、里好几天来寻找关于核能源的信息，如果没有电脑帮助的话。这里的差距很明显，因 有高 的当代人将会更 成功。无老师 范例：Another reason is that the modern people have more efficiency than thepast people. The better efficiency is important to success. Today, we may use the computer toimprove our efficiency. For example, the computer is very important to our suc
5、cess. When I wantto find the “nuclear energy” material, all I need to do is imputing the word in the google, and thenthe information will show from the screen. If we lived in the past, we have to go to the library tofind the information about the “nuclear energy”, because we have the computer. The d
6、ifference isvery obvious, so the modern people who have high technology would easier to be successful.无老师 ： 作 的 一 ，因 无老师 ， 接 。 一：优秀范例很Another reason is that modern people are more effective thanthose in the past.比 范例Another reason is that the modern people have more efficiencythan the past people.显然
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8、因 great 就有一 比 的更好一“的这 ，因 范例的better就显得 了。 优秀范例的one fundamental way 我们的important 了一 的fl 方，显得比 ，因 更 的方 ，就是 更重要的方。：优秀范例是We are able to make use of many tools increasing productivity today. 来 范例Today, we may use the computer to improve our efficiency.这里的差要在于优秀范例用了make use of这个 。 人们 不到的是优秀范例用了 词increasing
9、，使得个的 的 。优秀范例 了For instance, the computer plays an important role in our life interms of efficiency.比 范例For example, the computer is very important in the efficiency.显然优秀范例的plays an important role这个 用的很 ， 后的in terms of是我们 时很 用到的， 可以 接用in，是我们一 要 使用的，是fl 在 方面的时候， 用。五优秀范例是的很 As I want to search materia
10、l concerning the “nuclearenergy”, all I have to do is to type this term on Google and a great number of sources will pop outon the screen. 范例则是完败When I want to find the “nuclear energy” material, all I needto do is imputing the word in the google, and then the information will show from the screen.优
11、秀范例的As这个词不见得高级，是贵在用词的多化。然后优秀范例的material concerningthe “nuclear energy”fl 的是关于核能的相关信息 据，是 范例的 nuclearenergy” material则有可能让人误解是制作核能的原材料。 优秀范例的term这个词 思是 名词就显得比 范例的 word”更 书面化，更 准确。后优秀范例的 popout”更是显得十分的地道， 有 ，可以说完胜 范例的show这个词。然后下面的优秀范例 Given the past, I had to go to the library and bury me a couple ofd
12、ays looking for the information on nuclear energy without the assistance of computers.”是比范例的If we lived in the past, we have to go to the library to find the information about the“nuclear energy”, because we have the computer.漂亮很多。优秀范例头部的Given the past就用到了Given，fl 如果有（机会等）的 思，这里就是 如果是在过去，显然比 范例的If w
13、e lived in the past漂亮多了。 优秀范例的bury me a couple of dayslooking for的是十分的传神，颇似我们经 说的 把自己埋在书堆里的 。currency1是优秀范例后的without the assistance of computers虽然without用的简洁有 ，是稍显 ， 去掉是可以的。至于后一话，优秀范例 The distance is conspicuous, thus modern people withadvanced technology would succeed more readily. ”比 范例The differe
14、nce is very obvious,so the modern people who have high technology would easier to be successful.则是亮“不多。currency1是在advanced technology比 范例的high technology显得更地道，有就是在后的more readily显然比 范例的单纯的easier用词更 多化。无老师优秀范例：First and foremost, technology has provided children with easy access toscientific and liber
15、al art resources which is their best source of inspiration. For example, childrencould now easily gain access to academic databases through iPad screen, read classical works onKindle, or watch historic documents on Internet. These great works are essentially helpful toarousing their curiosity and pr
16、epares them with key knowledge necessary for any creation.However, these wonderful equipments and facilities are never as handy in the past, when kidscould only reach limited resources in public libraries or schools. In this sense, technology hasprovided the possibility for children to be more creat
17、ive.无老师优秀翻译： 一“， 术孩们提供了更 的接近 学 学作品的机会，这些恰好就是激 人创造能 的好的源泉。举个例，孩们现在就很 用ipad去查询学术据库，用kindle读经典名著，亦是在网上读历史 件。这些伟 的 明都会激 人们的好奇心， 他们 创造做好了必要的，知识上的准备。是，这些伟 的 明在之前是完全没有的，尤是当孩们 限制在公共图书馆 学校的那些有限资源里的时候。 这个角度来说， 术孩们提供了更具创造 的可能。无老师 范例：First and foremost, the technology provides more chances to get in touchwith s
18、cience and writing, which are the best way of inspiring creation. For example, childrencould use Ipad to search academic databases, use kindle to read great books, or read historydocument on the internet. All these creations could inspire the curiosity, but also offer technicaland sciential preparat
19、ion for the creation. But all these great equipment didnt exist in the past,especially the kids were limited resources of the public libraries and schools. So, the technologyprovides more creativity for the children.无老师 ： 内 好的诠释出英 的fl ，与用中 翻译成英 之的巨 差。可以说，英 是 细化，准确化的，是中 currency1要求 思fl 清楚即可，可以模糊处理，这一
20、“在 片 章中体现的 明显。一：优秀范例，First and foremost, technology has provided children with easy accessto scientific and liberal art resources which is their best source of inspiration.当头一棒，同是用provide这个fl ，优秀范例用了with easy access to这个 ，fl 的是 更 于接触到 是 范例First and foremost, the technology provides more chances to g
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22、 academicdatabases through iPad screen, read classical works on Kindle, or watch historic documents onInternet.相比于 范例For example, children could use Ipad to search academic databases, usekindle to read great books, or read history document on the internet. 这里很显然，For example并不会影响人们的分，影响 高低的， 是优秀范例 次拿
23、出了access这个词，是遇上依据不同，这一 接将与 词gain相 ，出了gain access to，这就显得词 的 度了解得很好。后当提到databases的时候，很恰当的加入了academic限 ，这与后面的提到ipad作并没有简单的ipad， 是 一 加入了screen，这里就与前面的academic一 相 ，显 出作于内 得很细 ，这都是加分的 。，优秀范例These great works are essentially helpful to arousing their curiosity andprepares them with key knowledge necessary
24、 for any creation.就更棒了这里的are essentiallyhelpful to与with key knowledge necessary for是 话 的亮“。比一下 范例 Allthese creations could inspire the curiosity, but also offer technical and sciential preparation for thecreation.”显然are helpful to 就是我们 时用的help的另一说，然后 用essentiallyfl 出 度的是相得 。然后with key knowledge限 出是在
25、 知识上有 重要的帮助， 就是我们经 的in the way of ，然后necessary for 就是我们很的must，这的用十分地道， 把这话 下来，这是典 的fl 方 的不同下一，优秀范例However, these wonderful equipments and facilities are never as handy inthe past, when kids could only reach limited resources in public libraries or schools.比 范例But all these great equipment didnt exis
26、t in the past, especially the kids were limited resourcesof the public libraries and schools.要的差是在词上。优秀范例的are never as handy in thepast， 历史上 出现过如 方 的 ，将as handy十分轻巧的 在之中， 得很 。是 范例则是didnt exist就显得很 ，没有 的 。然后优秀范例的后 reach limited resources这里的reach就用得很巧 ，reach 是 触 的 思，是触 到资源，不就是 读到这些资源 ，这里用的有“似于 下之中的 ，颇
27、得currency1。后一In this sense, technology has provided the possibility for children to be morecreative.用到了我们很用到的possible的名词fi possibility，同时 “ 话后面的tobe more creative，就完全了 范例So, the technology provides more creativity for thechildren.的provides more creativity这僵化的fi 。很多 fifl 的fl 是在 ，这个上能拿到的好作 在是 了， 很多时候不
28、是这些作 ， 是很多fl没有 去 这些作 。这不是 ”就有fl分了自己的满分作 。无老师 一时过来， fl拿这些满分作 都做些 1 ，要 一 这些作 的是 的。要细的读一下，这些作 一 的作的，到 是是 ，以 几 ，几 。2 ，要细分 在一 之中，一话所起到的作用。到 是，是例。3 多 ，要细想想这些作 一话说话的分 。4 比自己的。 一话的时候，脑中都要思fl，这话中 是 思，如果是我自己来，我会 并 在下一 自己的作 中 这些用。5 用词多 准确 。6 如果有需要的话， 一下是好的了，没有输入就没有输出 比如：In this case, computer as a representati
29、ve of modern technology plays a negative rolein learning information. 这话，我们自己很有可能的就是，In this case, computer that is a equipment ofmodern technology have a bad effect in learning information. 这里的差距就很十分明显了因 ，当 的 ，要有一 现 的 2011-8-2 Independent WritingDoes modern technology help students learn more infor
30、mation and learn it more quickly?Marvelous as it looks at first sight, modern technology does not help students learninformation at a greater speed and with higher efficiency in most cases; or it could work towardsthe opposite direction which led students to lose their initiative to learn and explor
31、e.First of all, one property of modern technology is latently harmful to any learning mind itdistracts. One thing we feel about when we are searching for information online is that theinternet, as an outstanding example of modern technology and even regarded as the innovator ofeducation, provides us
32、 with not only relevant results to make use of, but also external links toclick. More than once I turned on my computer to check school library for resources, but ended upwatching Youtube videos. In this case, computer as a representative of modern technology plays anegative role in learning informa
33、tion. We do acquire more information with the convenient tool,yet most of them are irrelevant and in the end procrastinating would lower our learning.Also, students would easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information. Althoughmodern technology could equip us with easy access to informatio
34、n, the huge amount of resourceswould actually leave us discombobulated. Therefore, it is only we possess information morequickly rather than we learn it more quickly. An illustrating example is my experience with a HKdigital library which stores almost all the books I desire. At first I enjoyed down
35、loading them fromthe database, however, one month later I ended up with hundreds of books stored in my hardwareyet none of them finished or ever clicked.Furthermore, modern technology gives students an illusion that information and realknowledge is easy to learn just by clicking mouse or watching vi
36、deos. But in fact this forms onlythe first step towards useful information and effective learning, as learning of any kind requiresfull concentration and interactive thinking, which are almost absent in the pocess of popular e-learning experience.To summarize, modern technology does not help student
37、s learn more information and learn itmore quickly, though it does make access to information and resources much more easily. Thepopular e-learning still lacks the concentration, depth, and interaction that are the hallmark oftraditional ways of educating and learning.2011-8-10TPO Independent writing
38、：我们生 的时代比 们 轻时生 的时代更好是更 It seems that people always have a desire to compare: am I prettier than others? Are we livingin a better age? Or, as the question goes, is our life easier and more enjoyable than it was severaldecades ago? I would say no, as I have witnessed the struggle and paradox of our g
39、eneration.First of all, we are now living in an age of revolution with no previous human experience thatcould be referred to. Living in such a fast-changing world would not be easy and comfortable atall; with everything keeps changing, everyone has to move fast in order to catch up with themajority.
40、 However, people were much more stable and care-free when our grandparents werechildren; they did not have to learn a second language in order to get a better job, or read a lot inorder to get informed. Yet in our age, these are supposed to be the responsibility of young people.Another discomfort of
41、 our age is that we are experiencing interpersonal alienation. With thedevelopment of communication technology, people in fact become alienated with friends andrelatives since they could be so easily accessed via phone or email. Too often we feel that few ofour friends are true friends, without the
42、traditional feeling of mutual affection which could only becreated by longtime apart. But several decades ago, people treasured their friends and maintainedrelatively close interpersonal relations, which is much more enjoyable than the estrangements weare experiencing.The last factor that has made o
43、ur age so uncomfortable is the abusive use of technology.Although it brings much convenience, it essentially changes human we are no longer the masterof tools, but instead the slaves of devices. We rush to metro station in order to catch an early train,sit in front of radioactive computers all day l
44、ong in order to get our work done, and stay in air-conditioned rooms all summer without experiencing the natural changes outside thick cementwalls. Several decades ago, people could still live closer to nature and make rational use ofmodern technology, which to me is the essence of human living expe
45、rience.However, the comparison between different times is itself ridiculous. The criteria could not beeasily determined, and opinions are highly personal. Anyway, we have a longer life span, moreadvanced medical facilities, and easier traffic than our grandparent when they were children, andwe shoul
46、d treasure the present experience. Imagination of the past might only be nostalgia if Iask my grandparents the same question, they might as well say that our life is much better than thepast generations. Who knows? As long as the world is still peaceful, life at any time would notbecome too difficul
47、t to handle.2011/8/14Independent writing:Most advertisements make products much better than they really are.I strongly agree to the statement that most advertisements makes the products presented muchbetter than they really are, and points below supports my idea.An essential reason concerns the natu
48、re of advertising advertisers, in most cases, would onlymake products seem better than they really are, not the other way around. Since the ultimate aimof advertising is to persuade people into buying something, and people would natually be attractedby something that is desirable rather than repellent, advertisements are certainly made to display amore attractive image of products. Therefore, customers would first be graviated towards th
