1、Application Essay 写作 第三课 Sample Outline and EssayBelow you will find a sample outline and the essay written from that outline.OUTLINEParagraph 1 (Introduction)I. Leading sentence :“It took me eighteen years to realize what an extraordinary influence my mother has been on my life.”II. Summary of main
2、 points: “I not only came to love the excitement of learning simply for the sake of knowing something new, but I also came to understand the idea of giving back to the community in exchange for a new sense of life, love, and spirit.”Paragraph 2 (First Supporting Point)I. Transition sentence:“My moth
3、ers enthusiasm for learning is most apparent in travel.”II. Supporting point:Her mothers enthusiasm for learning.III. Evidence: Learning through travel by using the example of a trip to Greece.Paragraph 3 (Second Supporting Point)I. Transition sentence:“While I treasure the various worlds my mother
4、has opened to me abroad, my life has been equally transformed by what she has shown me just two miles from my house.”II. Supporting point:Her mothers dedication to the community.III. Evidence:Her multiple volunteer activities such as helping at the local soup kitchen.Paragraph 4 (Conclusion)I. Trans
5、ition sentence:“Everything that my mother has ever done has been overshadowed by the thought behind it.”II. Reiteration of main points:“She has enriched my life with her passion for learning, and changed it with her devotion to humanity.”III. Taking it one step further:“Next year, I will find a new
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7、orting Point #1: analysis of example to show how it supports the topic sentence and thesis_B. Paragraph 2: 1. Supporting Point #2_2. Evidence for Supporting Point #2_C. Paragraph 3: 1. Supporting Point#3_2. Evidence for Supporting Point #3_III. Conclusion_COMPLETED ESSAYIt took me eighteen years to
8、realize what an extraordinary influence my mother has been on my life. Shes the kind of person who has thoughtful discussions about which artist she would most want to have her portrait painted by (Sargent), the kind of mother who always has time for her four children, and the kind of community lead
9、er who has a seat on the board of every major project to assist Washingtons impoverished citizens. Growing up with such a strong role model, I developed many of her enthusiasms. I not only came to love the excitement of learning simply for the sake of knowing something new, but I also came to unders
10、tand the idea of giving back to the community in exchange for a new sense of life, love, and spirit.My mothers enthusiasm for learning is most apparent in travel. I was nine years old when my family visited Greece. Every night for three weeks before the trip, my older brother Peter and I sat with my
11、 mother on her bed reading Greek myths and taking notes on the Greek Gods. Despite the fact that we were traveling with fourteen-month-old twins, we managed to be at each ruin when the site opened at sunrise. I vividly remember standing in an empty amphitheatre pretending to be an ancient tragedian,
12、 picking out my favorite sculpture in the Acropolis museum, and inserting our family into modified tales of the battle at Troy. Eight years and half a dozen passport stamps later I have come to value what I have learned on these journeys about global history, politics and culture, as well as my fami
13、ly and myself.While I treasure the various worlds my mother has opened to me abroad, my life has been equally transformed by what she has shown me just two miles from my house. As a ten year old, I often accompanied my mother to (name deleted), a local soup kitchen and childrens center. While she at
14、tended meetings, I helped with the Summer Program by chasing children around the building and performing magic tricks. Having finally perfected the “floating paintbrush” trick, I began work as a full time volunteer with the five and six year old children last June. It is here that I met Jane Doe, an
15、 exceptionally strong girl with a vigor that is contagious. At the end of the summer, I decided to continue my work at (name deleted) as Janes tutor. Although the position is often difficult, the personal rewards are beyond articulation. In the seven years since I first walked through the doors of (
16、name deleted), I have learned not only the idea of giving to others, but also of deriving from them a sense of spirit.Everything that my mother has ever done has been overshadowed by the thought behind it. While the raw experiences I have had at home and abroad have been spectacular, I have learned
17、to truly value them by watching my mother. She has enriched my life with her passion for learning, and changed it with her devotion to humanity. In her endless love of everything and everyone she is touched by, I have seen a hope and life that is truly exceptional. Next year, I will find a new home miles away. However, my mother will always be by my side.
